Nothing inspire
Day is harsh
Colors of sunset gloomy
Thought of dark night scary
Miserable is my spirit
Prayers selfish
Smiles heavy
My utterances are complains
Compliments hollow
Even blessings demanding
Heart far away to be loved
And too selfish to love
Though surrounded by many
Lost in world another
Awareness that
You are always there
Lost in this black hole,
No light on other end
Faith shaky, Truth hazy
Denial deep, Options ill
Life a burden
Is death freedom?
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OSI Prompt
: Depression
15 comments:
How well you have told about all the symptoms of depression.. Harshadji..yet I don't know whether death is freedom..but the way you have put it depression appears to be temporary death.. RS:)
Depression perfectly explained, with an excellent last line.
Intense. A bumpy ride through the harsh and gloomy emotions of a depressed mine. wonderfully written, Sir.
oh! its the condition of total chaos.
really nice depiction.
You've captured the despair of deep depression so intensely.
thanks for hosting the writing prompt this week!
peace,
deborah
A good take on the prompt, Harshad. If only the one in the black hole would leave or come out your poet's problems might be over.
Thank you for this prompt, it was a fun one. My set of three Senryū which you read could be taken either way on the prompt, depression being an economy in trouble like ours is OR a state of mind where everything is very sad, like yours.
Thanks again,
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Depression can rob us of so much and you've expressed this so beautifully. Thanks for inspiring us this week.
It seems to me after reading this that depression and distance have a lot in common.
Especially accurate, and the bit about "prayers selfish" is so well put!!!
no light on other end, ya it happens, every door seem to be closed in depression..
Faith shaky, Truth hazy, Denial deep...
You continue to amaze me, you understand life so well. These lines I must say it's what all is going in my mind and you have penned it down.
Wonderful expression!
Sad but beautifully expressed Harshad. You've interpreted this prompt perfectly.
Poetry book update:
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Your poem says how a person will feel while he is suffering from depression....Great poem!!
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